Main point

• What is most important to the reader?
  
  

• What draws attention?
  
  

• The subject and verb should be clear and close. Don’t put too much stuff (e.g. appositives) between the subject and the main verb.
  
  

• Use non-verb verbal only when the action is the focal point
  
  

• Unless intentional, put the sentence’s main point as soon as possible. Avoid cognitive load. Don’t ask the user to “Stay Put.”
  
  

• Stay put like “Given…” is ok, provided the context was built on the previous sentences, and is clear by now
  
  

• Sometime it’s good to hint the reader what next: “Before x. After y”. On “before”, the reader anticipates what comes after
  
  

• The Reader knows a lot. Don’t waste time to iterate
  
  

• Use meaningful, tangible way. Don’t use formal or enterprise language
  
  

• The main info should not be slipped as background or context (relative, subordinate)
  
  

• Single idea or thought
  
  

• Make sure that subordinates and adjuncts are not part of the main point. Anything that can be dropped grammatically should not include the main point
  
  

• What is the head word in each clause or phrase?
  
  

• What is the predicate?
  
  Is there predicative adjunct (here, stupid, part of the predicate of them all):\

“At breakfast on Thursday she bored them all stupid with flying tips she’d gotten out of a library book called Quidditch Through the Ages. (resultative)

At the party, he entered the room drunk, ignoring everyone around him (depictive)